tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post4688102415446992129..comments2023-10-21T18:11:04.414-07:00Comments on Joystory: Friday Snipets 10Joy Reneehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04976987581528470589noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-72079812548349038762007-09-15T09:51:00.000-07:002007-09-15T09:51:00.000-07:00I'm with Ian, I was a bit lost, too. These new cha...I'm with Ian, I was a bit lost, too. These new characters just pop in and I couldn't sort out who Fancy, Mae Bea and Cassie were.<BR/><BR/>But your description is very nice and the whole scene with that interview and the troll and all had a surrealistic feel to it. A bit like a Picasso painting. :)Gabriele Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17205770868139083575noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-77162789385269338202007-09-14T19:51:00.001-07:002007-09-14T19:51:00.001-07:00Awesome snippet. Definitely ratcheting the tension...Awesome snippet. Definitely ratcheting the tension. Well done. :)Annhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17968479919482739686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-55592825716940839522007-09-14T19:51:00.000-07:002007-09-14T19:51:00.000-07:00You have a gift for description. I also liked the...You have a gift for description. I also liked the Schrodinger analogy, and the description of a child bearing a child.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-68341960894433765292007-09-14T19:10:00.000-07:002007-09-14T19:10:00.000-07:00"The man all in black. The helmet. He looked right..."The man all in black. The helmet. He looked right at me. I couldn’t see his eyes through the faceplate but he was looking right at me when he tipped the motorcycle over" <BR/><BR/>I loved the description of this - so much - it was so eerie. :) I also loved the description of the "night-music."Brihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10337090157655667695noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-87811015661692304642007-09-14T15:26:00.000-07:002007-09-14T15:26:00.000-07:00Briana was out there somewhere and like Schrodinge...<I>Briana was out there somewhere and like Schrodinger’s cat she was both alive and dead, both harmed and unharmed. The intense wait was over, the hectic search about to begin, they would either find her or not--meanwhile both the grief of her loss and the joy of her recovery were caught in a dynamic dance in the hearts of those who loved her.</I><BR/><BR/>I thought the way you expressed that was really interesting. <BR/><BR/>I also liked the part about the change in the child's mother. <I>She had managed to conceive, bear and raise a child to nearly five years of age while never relinquishing her own claims to childhood;</I><BR/><BR/>That was very well done.Susan Bischoffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10811600322718603388noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-69692124539398885362007-09-14T14:17:00.000-07:002007-09-14T14:17:00.000-07:00I like the characters' ways of speaking, although ...I like the characters' ways of speaking, although it's the first snippet I've read of yours so I'm not entirely sure what's going on.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-85336020171074415502007-09-14T05:32:00.000-07:002007-09-14T05:32:00.000-07:00Oh, dear, I just realized I named the estate in my...Oh, dear, I just realized I named the estate in my new project Beulah Land, gate and all. I might have osmosis-ed Beulah from this! Ack! So I'll make a note and see about changing that.Joely Sue Burkharthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17895058332587825648noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-44074772121614133392007-09-14T03:02:00.000-07:002007-09-14T03:02:00.000-07:00I have to confess to being totally lost!I haven't ...I have to confess to being totally lost!<BR/><BR/>I haven't kept up with these as I should, and can't get a handle on what's going on at all. I'll go back and reread the others then try to comment more usefully (it's been a long night...)IanThttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05458989880437028922noreply@blogger.com