tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post4574725590054276675..comments2023-10-21T18:11:04.414-07:00Comments on Joystory: Friday Snippets 6Joy Reneehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04976987581528470589noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-62128259194810426852007-08-19T14:54:00.000-07:002007-08-19T14:54:00.000-07:00Cool snippet. I liked you use of colors.Cool snippet. I liked you use of colors.Annhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17968479919482739686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-35188227736873862242007-08-18T11:06:00.000-07:002007-08-18T11:06:00.000-07:00I'm usually not much for reading about kids, but I...I'm usually not much for reading about kids, but I like Briana. She's so lively.<BR/><BR/>And she gets up without crying after the falls, and continues with that door swinging. Me likes.Gabriele Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17205770868139083575noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-22234461809590032152007-08-18T10:28:00.000-07:002007-08-18T10:28:00.000-07:00A breeze-borne leaf, the same tarnished-flame colo...<I>A breeze-borne leaf, the same tarnished-flame color of the girl’s hair, kissed her cheek</I><BR/><BR/>Very nice. :-)<BR/><BR/>I was a little confused by the tense, too...IanThttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05458989880437028922noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-89059842459155473302007-08-18T09:57:00.000-07:002007-08-18T09:57:00.000-07:00This passage is just an explosion of color to me! ...This passage is just an explosion of color to me! The copper of the girls hair, the blackness of the wrought iron, the muted glimmer of dust motes, the red and plaid of the girl and her doll! Just love that!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-3811457528461533122007-08-18T08:26:00.000-07:002007-08-18T08:26:00.000-07:00You've really captured Briana so well, in contrast...You've really captured Briana so well, in contrast to Faye herself.Joely Sue Burkharthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17895058332587825648noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-14378989915267799712007-08-18T06:14:00.000-07:002007-08-18T06:14:00.000-07:00Briana is such an interesting child!!! Very likeab...Briana is such an interesting child!!! Very likeable and interesting. <BR/><BR/>In the first few paragraphs you mix tense up a bit...if this is all memory, should probably be all past tense rather than some present?<BR/><BR/>Will be good to see where this goes!Crystalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15261874076265338276noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-68893412815284086942007-08-18T03:41:00.000-07:002007-08-18T03:41:00.000-07:00That reminds me of childhood so much :) And it's ...That reminds me of childhood so much :) And it's also got a kind of gothic feel, with the mansion.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10255083486196598825noreply@blogger.com