tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post524510457210732041..comments2023-10-21T18:11:04.414-07:00Comments on Joystory: Monday Poetry Train #14Joy Reneehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04976987581528470589noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-15404025363542178232007-08-28T14:02:00.000-07:002007-08-28T14:02:00.000-07:00How lovely! I love the image of dandelion seas an...How lovely! I love the image of dandelion seas and "wake" with the mention of "dad" - it makes him seem like a ship, or some other epic presence in the poem. :)<BR/><BR/>I remember my dad - who is really of average height - towering over me like some awesome giant. I also loved the line about the light through the glass and the window curtain. Very beautiful and vivid.Brihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10337090157655667695noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-29891023766080686382007-08-27T19:32:00.000-07:002007-08-27T19:32:00.000-07:00Very cool poem, Joy Renee. Lovely images. P.S. Hop...Very cool poem, Joy Renee. Lovely images. <BR/>P.S. Hope you're feeling better.Annhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17968479919482739686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-88465995590283644002007-08-27T19:00:00.000-07:002007-08-27T19:00:00.000-07:00Took it back on childhood memories. Very neat and ...Took it back on childhood memories. Very neat and uncluttered. I loved it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-49721230317207985052007-08-27T18:37:00.000-07:002007-08-27T18:37:00.000-07:00Woot! I think I get this one about childhood memor...Woot! I think I get this one about childhood memories. Maybe. I like the lines that Rhian pointed out. I never thought much about dragons back then but I caught the image right away now.Lisa Andelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15179973783013139285noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-66704484389727729062007-08-27T18:16:00.000-07:002007-08-27T18:16:00.000-07:00Really wonderful Joy Renee! Here's my favorite:"Su...Really wonderful Joy Renee! Here's my favorite:<BR/>"Sun on window sash and glass<BR/>Spinning stories into dreams<BR/>Bright shadows sliding<BR/>Down the wall"<BR/>How I used to stare at those same shadows as I didn't nap.Julia Phillips Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15392455413201190775noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-21181268112847041842007-08-27T18:10:00.000-07:002007-08-27T18:10:00.000-07:00oh i loved this: "Dragon growls and chomps the gra...oh i loved this: "Dragon growls and chomps the grass<BR/>Browsing dandelion seas--<BR/>Daddy following<BR/>In its wake."<BR/>it speaks so clearly of the magic of childhood.Rhianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17825362911575046105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-58484644726842546032007-08-27T17:53:00.000-07:002007-08-27T17:53:00.000-07:00I like the language and sounds of the 3rd verse: ...I like the language and sounds of the 3rd verse: <BR/><BR/>Kitchen sounds of water-hiss and the timer telling Mama,"wait" - funny, b/c it's often adults telling children to have patience. <BR/><BR/>My prose is up too.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-41414338005899792512007-08-27T17:11:00.000-07:002007-08-27T17:11:00.000-07:00Really neat images, Joy Renee, but I think I'm mis...Really neat images, Joy Renee, but I think I'm missing out on the big picture here. I'm such a loser at these things...Susan Helene Gottfriedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12778191943289129869noreply@blogger.com