tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post2308519506190012986..comments2023-10-21T18:11:04.414-07:00Comments on Joystory: Friday Snipets 12Joy Reneehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04976987581528470589noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-89421746953371299552007-09-30T07:40:00.000-07:002007-09-30T07:40:00.000-07:00Hiya...I really liked the final pan of the camera ...Hiya...<BR/><BR/>I really liked the final pan of the camera - a great way to do the reveal.<BR/><BR/>I'm not sure whether a number of frantic/worried people would spend their time discussing word meanings and philosophy rather than searching; but that may be the quirkiness of the characters that you're showing us.<BR/><BR/>The very last sentence (involving pendulate) doesn't quite make sense, because pendulate is the infinitive. It goes like oscillate , so maybe you wanted 'Her feet pendulated?'. Although I think you can use it as an adverb too - 'her feet hung pendulate', but I'm not sure on that one...IanThttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05458989880437028922noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-40662943794991013272007-09-29T17:00:00.000-07:002007-09-29T17:00:00.000-07:00I liked Brick's character. He was honestly giving...I liked Brick's character. He was honestly giving his thoughts and feelings---not tactful at all, but honest. I think Faye responded to him very well.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-23756096001191438872007-09-29T10:39:00.000-07:002007-09-29T10:39:00.000-07:00Nice - I love the Mr. Travisty character. Very ni...Nice - I love the Mr. Travisty character. Very nice - I feel like there's probably more there than you're telling us. Makes him most interesting. :)Brihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10337090157655667695noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-64890548139468698172007-09-28T20:01:00.000-07:002007-09-28T20:01:00.000-07:00I've dropped by your Friday Snippet for the first ...I've dropped by your Friday Snippet for the first time, and I got a character wrap-up and everything. Tense scene - I wasn't sure by the end of it whether the child was still alive or not as she was found dangling. Interesting character dynamics, as well.Julia Phillips Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15392455413201190775noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-81561141557142525042007-09-28T14:03:00.000-07:002007-09-28T14:03:00.000-07:00So Troll is a name. I thought it was a troll when ...So Troll is a name. I thought it was a troll when he first appeared. Your world, or rather, some of the characters, are surreal enough for a troll to join them. :)<BR/><BR/>It's so Briana to run around in the woods and climb trees.Gabriele Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17205770868139083575noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-58493763336301018452007-09-28T05:43:00.000-07:002007-09-28T05:43:00.000-07:00Oh, wow, you such a way with these little hooks an...Oh, wow, you such a way with these little hooks and reveals! Great snippet.Joely Sue Burkharthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17895058332587825648noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976770.post-23311494131051173562007-09-28T05:29:00.000-07:002007-09-28T05:29:00.000-07:00THanks for the roster.I particularly liked the exc...THanks for the roster.<BR/><BR/>I particularly liked the exchange in this snippet between Julia and May Bea about Brick Travis, you give the impression there's more to it than that. ^_^Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com